When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
国が技術を発展させると、伝統的なスキルや生活習慣は消えてしまいます。それらを生き残そうとするのは無意味です。この意見に同意するか、または不同意するかをどの程度ですか？
TR: タスクへの回答として大変よいアイデアを使うことができています。明確に「反対」の立場をとり、適切な具体例も提示できています（handwriting / farming / handmade products / organic farmingなど）。また無駄で冗長な説明や要素がないため、安定したTR7の評価が得られるでしょう。今後さらに上を目指す場合は、より深い議論展開を意識するとよいです。全体のエッセイの長さも249wordsとわずかに指定の長さを下回りますので、より詳しい説明と議論展開を見せることができるとよいかと思います。
CC: 論理の流れは明快で、適切な段落構成を作ることができています。接続表現も基本的には正確に使えていますが、段落の切り替えでの誤用は全体の印象を大きく左右します。改めて用法やニュアンスを確認しておきましょう。また、議論展開の際、メインアイデアのすぐ後に"For example"を使用すると説明の幅が狭まる可能性があります。一つ一つのセンテンスの役割として、抽象的な説明と具体例を分けるように意識すると、ロジックを崩さずにより詳細で緻密な説明が可能になるかと思います。
LR: 大変幅広い語彙を概ね正確に使うことができています（globalised world / culturally and practically / identityなど）。ただ、繰り返しが冗長に見えてしまうこともあるようです（traditional skills and ways of life）ので、指示語や代名詞を活用して自然な流れを作りましょう。また、より洗練された語彙、緻密な説明を意識することでより確実なLR8の特徴になるかと思います。例えに具体性を持たせることで緻密な説明となり、語彙の範囲の広がりも見せることができます（modern intensive farming / large-scale industrial farming / avoid chemical pesticides/fertilizers など）。
GR: エラーやミステイクは頻出しているものの、意味を伝える上では問題なくさまざまな文法を使うことができています。より高いスコアを目指す場合は、文法の精度のブラッシュアップが必須になりますので、意識的に確認しておくとよいでしょう。
When technology advances, traditional skills and lifestyles become not necessary. Some people argue that keeping these traditions is useless because they no longer play an important role in daily life. However, I disagree with this view.*1
As nations advance technologically, traditional skills and lifestyles tend to fade. While some may hold the view that sustaining these traditions is pointless since they no longer contribute to everyday life, I disagree with this opinion.
Some may argue that old skills are no longer needed if technology develops. For example, we can now communicate with others via smartphones or store information on laptops, so old skills such as handwriting skills have become less important. Similarly, farming by hand or sewing clothes manually is not efficient because modern machines can do the same work much faster. From this point of view, keeping these traditional skills seems unnecessary.*2
Some argue that adhering to outdated skills or lifestyles is meaningless because technology continues to transform our daily lives. Now that we can communicate instantly through smartphones or store information digitally, skills such as handwriting and calligraphy seem less relevant today. In addition, many aspects of traditional life, such as farming by hand or weaving clothes manually, appear impractical in an era where modern machines have largely superseded them. From this perspective, maintaining these practices may be seen as unnecessary or inefficient.
On the other hand, I believe that*3 traditional skills and ways of life are still relevant in today's society, both culturally and practically. Traditional skills and ways of life*4 represent the nation's identity. Traditions such as music or handcrafts help people stay connected to the past and allow future generations to learn about them. Otherwise, society may lose its uniqueness in a globalised world. From a practical standpoint, traditional methods are still useful today. For instance, organic farming are more eco-friendly than modern farming and also supports healthier diets.*5 Another example is that handmade products are often durable than mass-produced goods. These examples show that old skills can still relevant in today's society.*6
However, I believe that preserving traditional skills and ways of life still holds great value, both culturally and practically. From a cultural perspective, they represent a nation's identity and heritage. Practices such as traditional music, dance, or indigenous crafts enable people to remain connected to their history and pass it on to future generations. Without them, societies risk losing their distinctive identity in an increasingly globalised world. On a practical level, many traditional skills also provide sustainable alternatives to modern technology. For example, organic farming techniques not only have a smaller environmental impact than industrialised mass production but also encourage healthier lifestyles. In addition, handmade products, albeit less efficient to produce, often last longer and generate less waste compared with mass-produced goods. These examples demonstrate that seemingly outdated skills are not only symbolic but also capable of addressing contemporary challenges.
In conclusion, while some people argue that traditional skills are no longer needed, I believe that they are still necessary. They protect cultural identity and also provide practical benefits. (249 words)*7
In conclusion, although some may claim that technological development reduces the need for traditional practices, this view is unconvincing. Such traditions enrich cultural identity and offer practical solutions to modern problems, and therefore deserve to be preserved alongside technological progress.
As nations advance technologically, traditional skills and lifestyles tend to fade. While some may hold the view that sustaining these traditions is pointless since they no longer contribute to everyday life, I disagree with this opinion.
Some argue that adhering to outdated skills or lifestyles is meaningless because technology continues to transform our daily lives. Now that we can communicate instantly through smartphones or store information digitally, skills such as handwriting and calligraphy seem less relevant today. In addition, many aspects of traditional life, such as farming by hand or weaving clothes manually, appear impractical in an era where modern machines have largely superseded them. From this perspective, maintaining these practices may be seen as unnecessary or inefficient.
However, I believe that preserving traditional skills and ways of life still holds great value, both culturally and practically. From a cultural perspective, they represent a nation's identity and heritage. Practices such as traditional music, dance, or indigenous crafts enable people to remain connected to their history and pass it on to future generations. Without them, societies risk losing their distinctive identity in an increasingly globalised world. On a practical level, many traditional skills also provide sustainable alternatives to modern technology. For example, organic farming techniques not only have a smaller environmental impact than industrialised mass production but also encourage healthier lifestyles. In addition, handmade products, albeit less efficient to produce, often last longer and generate less waste compared with mass-produced goods. These examples demonstrate that seemingly outdated skills are not only symbolic but also capable of addressing contemporary challenges.
In conclusion, although some may claim that technological development reduces the need for traditional practices, this view is unconvincing. Such traditions enrich cultural identity and offer practical solutions to modern problems, and therefore deserve to be preserved alongside technological progress.
日本語で学ぶIELTS対策専門スクール『PlusOnePoint（プラスワンポイント）』創設者・代表。『英語ライティングの鬼100則』（明日香出版社）著者。1997年に大阪大学医学部を卒業後、麻酔科専門医として活躍。2012年渡豪時に自身が苦労をした経験から、日本人を対象にIELTS対策のサービスを複数展開。難しい文法・語彙を駆使するのではなく、シンプルな表現とアイデアで論理性・明瞭性のあるライティングを指導している。これまでの利用者は4,500名を超え、Twitterで実施した「12週間チャレンジ」では、わずか4週間で7.0、7週間で7.5など、参加者4名全員が短期間でライティングスコア7.0以上を達成（うち2名は7.5を達成）。「IELTSライティングの鬼」の異名を持つ。オーストラリア在住14年、IELTS 8.5（ライティング 8.0）、CEFR C2。
